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The Spartans, Circa 1970, Surface for an Encore.

By Galen, August 16, 2009 2:48 PM

In a seldom used corner, of a not frequented room, stands a photograph.  It doesn’t have a frame, just a scratched plastic cover.  It’s tucked informally into the bookshelf on a space-permits basis.  It’s unpretentious and undemanding.  It can withstand years of neglect and inattention.  It never complains.

 

The photo is slightly out of focus.  It’s beginning to fade.  A liquid stain of unknown origin dribbles statically across the bottom right corner.  The setting is one of any hot, hazy, sticky, muggy,          eye-squinting days in Bien Hoa, Vietnam.

 

In the photo, exactly 26 young men lounge in various stages of casual repose on and around a UH-1 Helicopter.  Their average age is probably…21, maybe 22.  These men (kids, really) are, “The Spartans.”  They are the second flight platoon, 190th Assault Helicopter Company, Spartans, First Aviation Brigade. I flew with most of them.  I knew them all.

Spartans

I bring them to your attention nearly 40-years later because, they deserve an encore.  As I look at their faces, some, I don’t remember.  Some, I recognize, but can’t recall their names.  For other’s, oh yes, for others, I can recall their smallest mannerisms.  Their smile, favorite phrase, music, or the way they lit, or flipped away a cigarette.  They’re all lean, fit, and impervious to danger.

 

Still, not all the Spartans are present.  Michael Hatfield, a fellow pilot, is missing, killed on a morning reconnaissance outside the airfield boundaries, shot down—as was the Medivac helicopter dispatched to extract him.  His wife never remarried—to this day.  The night before he was killed, Mike and I stayed awake late, talking about the future, what we’d do when we got back to, “The World”, and his newly born son.

 

A gunner–a crewmember who sits in the back and mans the M-60 machine gun–named Graves is not in the photo.  If I ever knew his first name, I don’t recall it now.  Graves was killed on the Two Corps/Three Corps border flying a mission I no longer remember.  Some sort of search and rescue I think.  I have a hazy memory that it may have been a false alarm…for everyone but Graves and his family.

 

The sad part, really, is that much of this is forgotten. The pressing reasons we were there, no longer matter, overcome by everything from iPods to Iraq.  I wonder if 5 of 10 people picked at random could find Vietnam on a map—much less give you two sentences about its history.  After so much blood and anguish, the irony is, it was so important then, so unimportant now.

 

But, that wouldn’t matter to these folks.  Lincoln may have expressed it for the Nation at Gettysburg, but, I can assure you, these guys wouldn’t consider themselves, “honored dead.”  Hearing that, they’d laugh outright.  They’d just see themselves as dead.  Plain and simple.  Unvarnished, unpoetic, unclean, and unnecessarily dead.

 

But the ones that are in the photo hold my attention, too.  What happened to them?  Dead?  Alive? Prosperous?  Broke?  Successful?  Failure?  Killed in some silly accident after surviving all those dangers?  Or, are they destined to die peacefully in bed at age one hundred?  I’ll never know.  They’re all sixty or better now.  Hard to believe.  In my mind’s eye, they look exactly as you see them in the photograph.  Frozen and youthfully smiling.

 

I did meet with a couple of the guys not too long ago.   Dave Coons, was my first crew chief.  I flew with David nearly every day, as a new aircraft commander.  Dave made it his responsibility to ensure I stayed out of trouble.  (I out-ranked Dave, but, he’d been ‘in-country’ for 6 months when I got there.  I must have looked lost instead of tough; he knew I needed watching.)  Last I heard, Dave’s working for the Army National Guard in Utah.  I also met Curtis Loop, then a Captain and the Operations Officer.  He was smart and personable.  When I saw him about  five years ago, he was a retired General.  I’m not surprised.

 

Then, there’s Randy Score, my second crew chief.  Randy and I aren’t in the photo; we were out flying…hey, someone had to do the work.  Randy died suddenly a couple of years ago.  Heart attack. He was mid-fifties.  Fortunately, we’d corresponded.  Randy had seen my first book, and through it, traced me.  Randy gave me the idea to write him, Dave, and the Spartans, into the second book, Betrayal.  Randy read his section and thought it was great.  Typical Randy.  In the book, I blow him up in a helicopter crash.  Only his boots remain—with feet, I might add.  His, “Alright, cool!” reaction makes me smile even now.

 

So, what’s the point?  Well, your past has unique writing material you may have not considered, no matter your age.  If you shine your emotional light deep enough into the shadows, you’ll find relationships, events, adventures, and people that can not only appear in your work, but deepen and enrich it in a way research can’t.  You lived these events.  You can still see, hear, smell, and feel most of them.  They may be your most fertile ground for growing strong, dynamic characters, scenes, and chapters.  Don’t be afraid to look in those dusty corners.  You may have a Michael, Dave, Randy–or group of Spartans–ready to help.  It can be powerful, powerful stuff.  Don’t be afraid to look.  Sometimes, the folks you surface, might  deserve an encore.

Thanks for stopping by, Galen, Spartan 20.

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An Interview With Amelia Earhart

By Galen, August 16, 2009 2:46 PM

If you’re unfamiliar with Miss Earhart, please see the real Amelia Earhart story. Click on the “Last Flight” link to learn what really happened.  Or, Google her name.

Today, we’re honored to interview Amelia Earhart.

AE ME:  Welcome, Amelia.  We’re happ…

AE:  Call me AE; I’ve always hated, “Amelia”…sounds like a blood disorder.

ME:  Right.  Sorry.  So…AE…you’ve been keeping a low profile.

AE:  Are you kidding?  Low?  Any lower and I’d be dead.  In fact, I am dead…a small point you might want to mention.

ME:  Well, I didn’t want to scare our guests away…it is a family blog. Carolyn, Katie, or Elizabeth might bring their children.

AE: [Blank Stare]

ME: So, where have you been these, what, past 72-years?

AE: Aside from dead?

ME:  Uh, yeah.

AE:  Well, I hung-out on a South Pacific island for quite some time, then, did other stuff.

ME: Illuminating answer. What island?

AE: Nikumaroro, little scratch of sand about…ummmm, well..a bunch of miles South of my actual destination, Howland Island.

ME: How far South?

AE: A bunch.  What are you, the IRS?  I missed the damn thing, how do I know how far? If I knew exactly, I wouldna missed it.

ME:  Touchy about it, huh?

AE:  No.

ME: Humph.  Nice there?

AE: Don’t get out much, do you?

ME: Well, I…

AE: No, it’s not, “nice there.”  It’s 115 degrees year-round, little shade or fresh water, blowing sand, crabs the size of small dogs…that eat flesh—by the way, mosquitoes the size of small crabs, blood sucking ticks, Coke bottle-sized lizards, flies…

ME: Uh, okay, I get the idea.

AE: …it’s the place that time forgot.  I wouldna been surprised to see a dinosaur amble down the beach.

ME:  Okay, we get it!

AE:  I’m just sayin’…Nice?  Geez.

ME: Why didn’t you find Howland?

AE:  [Glare] Gee, thanks for asking.  Trying to embarrass me?

ME:  No, just a logical question…that the whole world has been asking–for 72 years, by the way.

AE:  Long story. Let’s skip it…at least for now.

ME:  Okay. I know the Navy looked for you. Did you see any search aircraft?

AE:  Yep. This is a sore point. How those rat bastards didn’t see a twin-engine aircraft sitting wheels up on the beach, or me jumping around waving…well, I’ll never know…but, I have suspicions.

ME: About what?

AE: Let’s skip it…at least for now.

ME: Did you die there? On Nikumaroro?

AE: No.  I died in Greenville, Ohio.

ME: Greenville?  Interesting.  Tell us about it.

AE: Ghoulish little twerp, aren’t you?

ME: Well, the readers wanna know. I’m obligated to ask.

AE: Shark attack.

Me:  Beg pardon?

AE:  S H A R K  A T T A C K.

ME: In Ohio?

AE:  Got dirt in your ears? 

ME:  No, just…well, it’s odd.  Not many sharks in Ohio.

AE:  Only takes one, as they say.

ME: How did you find this one?

AE: At the county fair.

ME: The fair?

AE: I fell into the shark tank….from the Ferris wheel ride.

ME: You’re putting us on.

AE: Wanna see the bite wounds.

ME: No! No, tanks. Ha!

AE: Cute.

ME: Thanks!

AE:  Look-up sarcasm when you get the chance?

ME: Sure, how do you spell it?

AE:  Never mind.

ME:  Why Ohio?

AE: Employment.

ME: As a…

AE: Fortune cookie writer. I’d obviously spent lots of time in the orient, so, it was easy to make a case to the Crumbling Cookie Company that I could do the job…without, well, crumbling.

ME: Sigh.

AE: All true, Galen. I wanted a low profile life. I’d been aviation’s darling girl of the 1930s. I was ready for some peace and quiet—less the crabs, heat, etc. So, I picked Ohio and fortune cookie writing. Very peaceful.

ME: Anything to the reports about you spying on the Japanese?

AE: Yes. All true. I had a Turk Island over flight to photograph the Japanese naval installations.

ME: The government denied that, you know.

AE: Ya think? You really do need to get out more.

ME: Maybe once I sell my house.

AE: It’s why we missed Howland and ran out of fuel.

ME: How’s that?

AE: I flew like crazy to avoid the Japanese fighters, which I did, but I burned lots of gas…lots of it. Plus, that evasive maneuver stuff put me way off-course. Never did find myself again.

ME: When and how did you get off the island?

AE: About 1958.  I was rescued. A ship owned by Ed Sullivan stopped. They were looking for animal acts for his show…but the crabs proved too cantankerous. I however, was very cooperative and the captain took me along.  Kinda cute too…especially after all those male-deprived years.

ME:  Uh…family blog???

AE:  Right.

ME: Why didn’t you come forward about your adventures?

AE: I tried, but got a White House gag-order slapped on me. Dunno why, the war had been over for ten, twelve years by then. Guess they were still trying to be buddies with the Japanese, and all that war stuff was just best forgotten. Overtime, I became old news, then, no news.

ME: Our word count is about up, AE. Any last thoughts for our readers?

AE: You bet.  Some pointers I picked up writing at Crumbling Cookie…

Eliminate unnecessary words

Substitute “damn” every time you’re inclined to write “very;” your editor will delete it and the writing will be just as it should be. ~Mark Twainclip_image001

I used to feel that using words like “really”, “actually”, or “extremely” made writing more forceful. It doesn’t. They only get in the way. Cut them and never look back.

Write with passion

Fill your paper with the breathings of your heart. ~William Wordsworthclip_image001[1]

It’s not hard to realize that unless you’re excited about your writing no one else will be.

Paint a picture

Don’t tell me the moon is shining; show me the glint of light on broken glass. ~Anton Chekhovclip_image001[2]

Simply stating something is fine, but when you need to capture attention, using similes, metaphors, and vivid imagery to paint a picture creates a powerful emotional response.

Be unique and unpredictable

I owe my success to having listened respectfully to the very best advice, and then going away and doing the exact opposite. ~G.K. Chestertonclip_image001[9]

Consistency is the last refuge of the unimaginative. ~Oscar Wildeclip_image001[10]

Following what works will only get you so far. Experiment with new styles, even if it means taking criticism. Without moving forward, you’ll be left behind.

ME:  Wow.  Great tie-in with writing.

AE:  I can see you need the help.

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Expository Paint and Goldilocks: What They Have in Common

By Galen, August 16, 2009 2:43 PM

Before we begin, please allow me to announce that Jane Kennedy Sutton has won the first annual…

Galen Kindley Award for Enduring Admiration.

 

Jane correctly decoded the message in yesterday’s post.  Congratulations, Jane!   Your award is posted on my website at this link.  Right click on it, “Save Picture As…,” and it’s yours.  I encourage others to take just a second to look at this prestigious award.  You may have a chance to win one with the next contest!  Now, to our regular appointment.

 

This is a test.  How do painters know when they’ve applied enough paint? 


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Answer:  When they no longer see the color over which they are painting. Like Goldilocks, they’ve hit upon the amount of paint that’s, “just right.”

 

 

It’s not that easy for writers—of course. When I write, I wonder how much chevyexpository paint to use on my digital canvas.  How much is, “just right?”  You know, how much detail to use to evoke a reader’s-eye picture of…oh, say a Columbo-like car, for example. (Fun link there by the way.)

 

Let’s say I want to describe some battered old clunker.  I have choices.  I could say…

  • It was an old car.
  • It was a 1956 car.
  • It was a green, 1956 car.
  • It was a green, 1956 Chevy.
  • It was a green, 1956 Chevy Impala with a convertible top.
  • It was a green, 1956 Chevy Impala with a battered convertible top.
  • It was a green, 1956 Chevy Impala with a beige, but battered, convertible top.
  • It was a green,1956 Chevy Impala with a beige, but battered, convertible top, and worn seat covers.
  • It was a green, 1956 Chevy Impala with a beige, but battered, convertible top, and worn, purple seat covers.
  • It was a dirty, green, 1956 Chevy Impala with a beige, but battered, convertible top, worn,  purple front seat covers, and a dented fender.
  • And on and on.

 

babyNow, tack a second “descriptive” car sentence behind this one, and stack another behind it, and, well, you  see the problem.  The writer quickly reaches a point of expository and descriptive diminishing returns.  At that point, useful information becomes too much information.  like the photo, says,“The more I think (or the author tells me) the more confused I get.”

 

This descriptive conundrum is one of the writing gray areas Elizabeth Spann Craig is so good at pinpointing.  Like all imponderables, there is no final or correct answer.  Additionally, reader tastes complicate the matter.  Some readers like lots of detail.  Other readers want the minimum. The reader’s detail taste and tolerance are unknowable.  So, trying to write for your reader won’t work.

 

What’s a girl to do??  My technique is to evaluate the importance of the the object to be described.  The more important to the story, scene, or action, the more detail it merits–up to  a  point.   It’s  a  gut-feel kind of thing.  Does my technique work?  Haven’t a clue.  I hope so.

 

But wait, there’s more.  While we’re mucking about this terrain, there’s an associated problem we may as well tackle.  Beyond the depth and breadth of the description dilemma, “how” you describe an object can also be problematic. Huh?  Yeah, that’s confusing.  Let’s try this…Telling the reader, “The room was big,” isn’t too helpful, is it?  Nope.  And, (not to start a sentence with a conjunction) as you probably feared, I have another handy dandy technique to share.  No, I’m not sure this works either.  So what is it already???

 

I try to relate the object to something recognizable, something common to us all.  So, in this case, I might say.…”The room was about the size of a tennis court and half again as tall.”  There are more elegant ways to say it; but you see the point.  A comparison with a known object is generally helpful.

 

So, there you have it.  Two areas that bug me and how I handle them.  We’d all appreciate it if you’d share any special techniques you have to deal with these issues.  If you have none, then, don’t hesitate to add some gratuitous comment like, “Gee, Galen, you’re a pretty brilliant guy…with good looks…and great insight…and you’re my favorite author.”  If it’s too repugnant to type those words, then, cut and paste works.  Just trying to be helpful.  Thanks for visiting!

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